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comment by kithpendragon · 2022-10-09T10:43:41.731Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

The statue made a rising whine as the lights began to pulse rhythmically. The legs stretched out, probing a bit in random directions for an instant before one found the surface of the floor and the rest immediately followed, each with its own sharp little click. When the machine appeared sure of its footing, it began to slowly push itself up while the weapon on its back glowed a dull red and swiveled around sharply. It was so beautiful! And a bit terrifying. I took a step back, and the statue seemed to notice! I can't say how I knew, but I was sure it looked right at me.

All at once, the whine began to fall and the lights went dark again, starting with the weapon. The legs lost their strength and the body of the statue lowered gently to the floor. "Puts on a good show, doesn't it?" the priest chuckled. "This one was mostly disabled generations ago, but the priests back then were clever enough to give us a little light and movement in case just seeing the machine wasn't enough to restore somebody's faith." He took the strange black brain back out of the socket and returned it to its pedestal, carefully replacing the cover.

"I... I just wanted... too..." My voice was shaking as hard as my body. But the priest was still smiling. He put a kind hand on my shoulder and gently steered me back to the church. "It's late. We will talk more tomorrow, after you've had whatever sleep you can get."

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comment by Alex Beyman (alexbeyman) · 2022-10-09T21:24:11.306Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Nooo >:0 The ending has to be bleak, what have you done

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comment by Zian · 2022-10-10T01:31:04.071Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

How about this instead?

//start quote

The statue made a rising whine as the lights began to pulse rhythmically. The legs stretched out, probing a bit in random directions for an instant before one found the surface of the floor and the rest immediately followed, each with its own sharp little click. When the machine appeared sure of its footing, it began to slowly push itself up while the weapon on its back glowed a dull red and swiveled around sharply. It was so beautiful! And a bit terrifying. I took a step back, and the statue seemed to notice! I can't say how I knew, but I was sure it looked right at me.

//end quote

There was a thudding sound. I turned around. I was alone now. The priest was being consumed by the statue.

Seconds later,  a tremendous crashing noise was heard as an appendage burst out into the open air.

And, the voice of John Henry boomed in my ears as he assured me that I had done the right thing. I had a bright future ahead as the first of a new group of clear-headed priests.

We were going to do so much together!