HPMOR: What could've been done better?

post by Anubhav · 2012-01-28T13:31:07.828Z · LW · GW · Legacy · 111 comments

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Warning: As per the official spoiler policy, the following discussion may contain unmarked spoilers for up to the current chapter of the Methods of Rationality. Proceed at your own risk.

Assume HPMOR was written by a super-intelligence implementing the CEV of Eliezer Yudkowsky and assorted literary critics. What would it have written differently?

... is what I want to know, but that's hard to answer. So here's an easier question:

In what ways do you think Eliezer's characterisations/world-building/plot-fu are sub-optimal? <optional> How could they be made less sub-optimal? </optional>

(My own ideas are in the comments.)

To put it another way... Assume a group of intrepid fanfic writers in the late 2020s are planning to write a reboot. What parts of Eliezer's story do you think they should tweak?

And just to make sure we're all on the same page: Eliezer isn't going to go back and change anything he's written to bring it in line with anything suggested here. This is purely an "Ah, just consider the possibilities!" thread.

... which means that we can safely suggest drastic rewrites encompassing 30 chapters or something. Or change fundamental facts about the world.

(Exercise due restraint on this one. Getting rid of the Ministry/the Noble Houses/blood purism would probably turn the story into something completely different; this isn't what we're trying to do here.)

With that, let the nit-picking begin!! 

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comment by ArisKatsaris · 2012-01-30T17:11:21.867Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Since 27/Jan Fanfiction.net disabled every single html link from the user profile page -- which means all those fanarts, etc, the links to the ePub and MOBI versions and so forth.

Once again fanfiction.net screws its members.

Was anyone prudent enough to save all those links? We must figure out some other location to gather them all.

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comment by Eliezer Yudkowsky (Eliezer_Yudkowsky) · 2012-02-08T20:39:08.556Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Fixed. All links now moved to HPMOR.com.

comment by Alicorn · 2012-01-30T17:16:19.595Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I just checked my profile, and the links are all still clickable in the edit box, so they are not lost - Eliezer can get at them.

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-02-07T12:31:52.602Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

One of you did PM him as soon as this happened, right?

comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-28T13:44:56.294Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

To start with.... I'd recommend raising every character's age by a few years. (I think this is a 'love-it-or-hate-it' idea, but I have no clue how prevalent either of these viewpoints are... How many people think that the first-years really act like eleven-year-olds? And I'm not just talking about Harry...)

And, consequently, Hogwarts now has only four years.

Also, I'm clueless about the math, but... I seem to remember reading in a discussion thread that 1000 students in Hogwarts implies a total wizarding population the size of a small town. So I'd cram in 4000 students into the 4 years of Hogwarts. (We're gonna need TAs now, but that doesn't change anything fundamental.) Unless... The population is still too small, in which case... I suppose you could keep the 1000 students and have other wizarding schools.

And I'd suggest compressing the first four chapters into one.

ETA: Also, partial transfiguration. Harry shouldn't get it right that quickly.

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comment by falenas108 · 2012-01-28T15:32:23.850Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

ETA: Also, partial transfiguration. Harry shouldn't get it right that quickly.

I think the point of that was partial transfiguration was a low hanging fruit that could be done fairly easily, but only if you had the right mindset. Other than having to hold timelessness in his head, it's not any harder than regular transfiguration.

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-29T06:43:10.174Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I think the point of that was partial transfiguration was a low hanging fruit that could be done fairly easily, but only if you had the right mindset. Other than having to hold timelessness in his head, it's not any harder than regular transfiguration.

Come to think of it, you're right.

I'd been approaching it from the "hero must struggle for several episodes to get awesome powers" angle, but Eliezer was obviously writing it to demonstrate the opposite.

(Although Harry being able to hold timelessness in his head with half an hour of trying is still Marty Stu-ish.)

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comment by Luke_A_Somers · 2012-01-29T15:08:49.803Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

No one else has ever tried it. It might not be that hard once you know what it is.

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comment by CronoDAS · 2012-02-17T04:58:51.514Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

He really should have been able to do it with billiard-ball atoms. Just define "the left half of the brick" as an object. It doesn't make any sense that you can transfigure a bicycle but not the front wheel of that bicycle..

Also, as someone on TV Tropes pointed out, Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone is set in 1991, but Julian Barbour's book The End of Time was published in 1999 and his research paper directly addressing the subject was published in 1994.

comment by kilobug · 2012-01-28T14:14:33.329Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

More than removing the first 3 years of Hogwarts, the tempo of MoR could be changed so that we don't have all those events happening during Harry's first year. There is time pressure regarding the fact that DADA teachers aren't supposed to last more than one year, but something could have been done to circumvent that, and allow the events of the currently written MoR to span like 3 years of Hogwarts, with Harry being 13 or 14 when we reach the "Standfort Prison Experiment" part.

I do think that the first chapters are specially good with a young (11 yo) Harry, and that having him a teenager when he discovers about magic would ruin them. It would also make the whole Harry-Draco relationship completely different - their relationship in MoR is very interesting, but it wouldn't have felt realistic for it to happen with a teenager Draco, while it is realistic with a still childish Draco.

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comment by Slackson · 2012-01-28T19:45:31.639Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

From the Harry Potter Wiki: "Riddle used his wand at that time to place a curse on the job, causing its occupant to suffer some misfortune that would drive them from the job in a year or less. "

We also know that canon!Lupin was just outed as a werewolf and resigned, and canon!Moody seemed fine when he got out of the Trunk. Quirrel isn't doomed to die at the end, just to no longer be defense professor. Also, vs Ibyqrzbeg vf pbagebyyvat Dhveery, gura gur phefr zvtug abg nccyl gb uvz.

So basically, Quirrel could continue to exist, but not as Defense professor.

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comment by atorm · 2012-01-28T23:36:13.523Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

The curse could just be removed as not plot-important.

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-29T06:35:34.210Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I regret that I have only one upvote to give. Never thought of cutting the Gordian knot that way.

ETA: Although to be fair to myself, I never tried to think of ways to make Quirrel last for over a year.

comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-29T06:41:24.939Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

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comment by Slackson · 2012-02-02T20:26:09.304Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Hayrff Uneel naq Dhveery fgntr gung onggyr jvgu Ibyqrzbeg. V vzntvar Dhveery unf engure qvssrerag cynaf sbe gung, gubhtu.

comment by MixedNuts · 2012-02-16T17:18:39.560Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Claims of "No kids act like that!" where I've personally been or known kids who act exactly like that have made me very suspicious of the general pattern. Harry probably acts just like Eliezer did, or would have if he'd already known about Bayes.

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comment by CronoDAS · 2012-02-17T05:04:37.419Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Apparently the "you bite one math teacher" incident is an exaggeration of something in Eliezer's own childhood. (At least I hope it was an exaggeration...)

comment by Anubhav · 2012-02-17T04:27:11.943Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

That response has always annoyed me. If utter realism was a major component of what people wanted out of a story, they'd be stalking Facebook profiles instead. Or watching Pulp Fiction ad nauseam, or something.

IRL a person I've never heard of might survive being struck by lightning thrice and I'd say "meh", but something like that better not happen in a story without a very good reason.

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comment by TheOtherDave · 2013-05-26T16:49:03.062Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I'm puzzled by this response. If realism isn't important, what's the problem with having the Hogwarts kids acting more mature (or intelligent or whatever) than real kids that age typically do in the first place? It's just a narrative trope that marks them as exceptional and therefore interesting.

comment by JenniferRM · 2012-01-30T04:15:03.652Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I seem to remember reading in a discussion thread that 1000 students in Hogwarts implies a total wizarding population the size of a small town.

This discussion? :-)

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-30T04:18:43.634Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Yeah, that's the one.

ETA: Didn't remember the bizarre conclusions that discussion reached, though. Is there any indication that Eliezer thought about the sociological angle before writing this? He might have made an honest mistake about the population.

Or the population might actually be much larger, Hogwarts might not be the only magical school, and the story just hasn't gotten around to telling us yet.

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comment by JenniferRM · 2012-01-30T05:45:17.457Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

It seems likely that Eliezer noticed this early and possible that he kept it in mind while writing and editing later chapters. I noticed after that discussion (though maybe this is just confirmation bias on my part?) subsequent chapters started having a bit more social background that systematically favored "moderately big Magical Britain" (closer to 70,000 than 3000) and more political detail that seemed to me "more realistic" for the suggested scale.

There were a lot of slightly recurring cameos by people who made fan art, for example, so that you get more of a sense that the writing works a bit like the Simpsons with a relatively gigantic cast and a more available whenever the plot requires. And then there was subtle but direct stuff like the digression into the daily lives of Auror's guarding Azkaban with discussion of their alienation, working for triple pay (why official "triple pay"? why so formal? are their wizard labor unions?), and their silent culture of tolerated bribery. It smells to me like a small department within a much larger bureaucracy, or a platoon in an army, where people in the trenches together are reasonably OK pragmatically optimizing for mutual local benefit at the expense of the more sweeping institutions.

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-30T06:05:31.570Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Also, apparently there are other schools in MoR!Britain.

Isn't a 70k population still too tiny to support the MoR-verse's level of social complexity?

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comment by ArisKatsaris · 2012-01-30T12:27:45.359Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Isn't a 70k population still too tiny to support the MoR-verse's level of social complexity?

I don't think so. I think 70K population is more than sufficient for what we observe. After all, the primary servant-class (House-Elves) isn't included in that number. The primary banking/financial class and atleast some portion of the manufacturing class is goblins, which is also not included in that number. Anything that concerns the gathering of raw non-magical material (Farming/mining/etc) can be gotten by trading with (or thieving from) the muggles.

The rest: nobility, ministry employees, aurors, shopkeepers, athletes -- I think they can fit in easily in a population of some dozens thousands. Possibly even less.

comment by Nornagest · 2012-01-28T23:36:36.948Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I always assumed, when reading the original books, that other British magical schools existed and Hogwarts just happened to be the best of them. The society as presented simply doesn't make sense otherwise, even accounting for the fact that wizards seem to live significantly longer than Muggles and don't seem to have many more kids.

It does take some handwaving (how would Hogwarts choose which magical children to send its acceptance letters to?), but not as much as fitting what looks like some pretty robust commerce and a rather heavyweight bureaucracy into a population of at most thirty thousand or so (less, if you extrapolate from class sizes).

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-29T06:53:47.361Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

not as much as fitting what looks like some pretty robust commerce and a rather heavyweight bureaucracy into a population of at most thirty thousand or so

I assumed that ~ 50% of wizarding adults were employed by the Ministry alone. Sounds just like the pointless bureaucracy you'd expect wizards to create.

Commerce, yes. That's much more difficult to explain. Even more difficult to explain is the existence of specialised journals like Transfiguration Weekly. You'd need a European wizarding population of ~ a million at the very least. (And I'm probably underestimating.)

More importantly, how do you extrapolate from the class sizes? How are different age groups distributed in the population? (Not knowing the math sucks.)

ETA:

I always assumed, when reading the original books, that other British magical schools existed and Hogwarts just happened to be the best of them.

In Deathly Hallows, the Ministry made it mandatory for every wizarding child of school-going age to attend Hogwarts. IIRC, Lupin noted at the time that "Parents could always educate their children at home if they wished." Didn't say anything about other magical schools.

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comment by PhilosophyTutor · 2012-04-18T00:42:59.200Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

We probably shouldn't leap to the assumption that Transfiguration Weekly is a peer-reviewed journal with a large staff publishing results from multiple large laboratories. For all we know it's churned out in a basement by an amateur enthusiast, is only eight pages long on a good week and mostly consists of photographs of people's cats transfigured into household objects.

comment by Nornagest · 2012-01-30T17:34:36.422Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

In Deathly Hallows, the Ministry made it mandatory for every wizarding child of school-going age to attend Hogwarts.

I'd forgotten about that; but then again, I formed most of my opinions regarding Potter canon when I was a teenager reading books 3 and 4. I was an adult by the time I got to Deathly Hallows, and I didn't read it too closely.

I suppose Goblet of Fire could be said to imply wizarding schools are fairly rare, though; it never mentions any continental schools besides Durmstrang and Beauxbatons. The movies seem to imply that those are all-male and all-female respectively, which might in turn suggest more schools offscreen, but I don't think the books do.

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comment by Alicorn · 2012-01-30T17:57:50.762Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I don't think the books directly suggest that there are Durmstrang girls (although they never claim that it's a unisex school), but Beauxbatons boys are mentioned, particularly in the context of the Yule Ball.

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comment by taelor · 2012-01-31T15:44:30.426Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

According to this, Durmstrang has girls as well.

comment by TheShrike · 2013-05-26T08:59:04.453Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I could be wrong here, but I definitely remember someone, maybe Hagrid, claiming early on that Hogwarts was, "the best school in magical Britain." That implies others. It's entirely possible that newer magical schools without a history of legendary wizards and a past alliance with two other prestigious schools would go largely unmentioned in the original Harry Potter.

comment by Desrtopa · 2012-01-30T16:26:15.070Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Hogwarts was referred to on a number of occasions in canon as the "best" wizarding school in Britain.

As long as it doesn't directly bear on the storyline though, I wouldn't trust J. K. Rowling to keep careful track of everything she's already written; I suspect she had different ideas at different times of whether Hogwarts was the only wizarding school in Britain.

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comment by TheShrike · 2013-05-26T09:06:25.068Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I'm not sure about that, if anything she's put on Pottermore is to be trusted, she's written an extensive off-page history for her world. The most interesting example is what she's written about the Malfoy's. Evidently, the family made most of their money in dealing with muggles prior to the ministry instituting the laws regarding secrecy. Once it became politically favorable to distance a prominent family from muggle ties, the Malfoy's put on a strong pureblood facade that caught on after a few generations.

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comment by Desrtopa · 2013-05-26T12:29:32.181Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

That sounds plausible, but not necessarily contradictory, since she may have come up with that history after writing things in earlier books which conflicted with it. She didn't seem to have outlined all the books thoroughly in advance (if she did, she certainly failed to set up elements like the Deathly Hallows very well.)

comment by KPier · 2012-01-30T04:55:33.598Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

In the original books, Harry's cohort was born ten years into an extremely bloody civil war. I always assumed birth rates were extremely low for Harry's age group, which would imply that the overall population is much larger than what you'd extrapolate from class sizes.

Of course, the numbers still don't work. There are 40 kids in canon!Harry's class. Even if you assume that's a tenth of the normal birthrate and the average person lives to 150, you get a wizarding population of 6,000.

In MoR, class sizes are around 120 (more than half the kids are in the armies, and armies are 24 each), which is still problematic - with the generous assumptions above, you get a population of 18,000. But MoR does seem to hint there are other magical schools: Daphne at one point wonders if it's worth going to the same school as Harry just to go to the same school as everybody important, which supports the theory that there are other magic schools, but that almost everyone influential went through Hogwarts.

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comment by taelor · 2012-01-30T12:09:49.577Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

In the original books, Harry's cohort was born ten years into an extremely bloody civil war. I always assumed birth rates were extremely low for Harry's age group, which would imply that the overall population is much larger than what you'd extrapolate from class sizes.

In that case, shouldn't we see evidence of a baby boom occurring immediately following the end of the war, probably in the form of the years after Harry's being noticeably bigger than those that came before? canon!Harry is rather unobservant, but you'd think he'd have noticed at least that.

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-30T16:29:42.919Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Rule of thumb: canon!Harry notices nothing. Nothing. (Unless it's plot-relevant.)

Harry never tells us anything about the younger students. Unless they happen to be called Ginny/Luna/Colin/Denis/Romilda.

comment by Desrtopa · 2012-01-30T16:28:01.159Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

For Harry to notice it would require Rowling to have thought of it. Plus, since it wasn't really plot relevant it would be something of a violation of Conservation of Detail.

comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-30T06:15:48.893Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I'd forgotten about that quote.

For reference, it's

Daphne abandoned all pretense of aristocratic poise and let her head fall to the desk with a dull thud, as she wondered whether going to the same school as all the other important families was really worth going to the same school as the Chaos Legion.

Chapter 74.

comment by Desrtopa · 2012-01-30T16:22:59.689Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Given that they canonically keep tabs on underage witches and wizards with magic, I suspect that they judge based on some combination of how magically promising the prospective student appears to be, what their social connections are (are they related to any highly placed individuals who graduated from Hogwarts?) and possibly some sort of affirmative action for muggle born students.

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comment by TheShrike · 2013-05-26T09:14:23.050Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Actually the ministry has a trace spell, evidently, on the whole of magical Britain. Magical misdemeanors from underage wizards go largely unpoliced in all magical households, explaining the fact that several familys, such as the Malfoys and the Weasleys have sent children to Hogwarts who openly acknowledge having learnt spells outside of Hogwarts. You may recall, once the ministry was in Voldemort's pocket, the trace was used to track down underaged wizards not in Hogwarts. I'd always supposed Hogwarts worked in conjunction, or possibly with special permissions, from the ministry to use the trace to send letters to children who had performed slight magical acts, such as Harry phasing his cousin through the glass at the snake exhibit.

comment by ArisKatsaris · 2012-01-28T20:13:35.665Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I think it's somewhat premature to talk about what could be done better before the story is complete. For starters, I'm not sure it psychologically counts as positive reinforcement of the writer writing more quickly, if one criticizes too much while still it's being written...

  • That having been said, I'd like to say that I found chapter 19 (where Harry is made to "lose") very unbelievable.
  • The relationship between battles, Quirrel points, and the wish Quirrel offered to the person out of all 7 years who'd have the highest number of Quirrel points could also have been done a bit better, I think. Right now, though the determinator is supposed to be the Quirrel points everyone was acting as if the sole determinator were the battles, and the battles of only the first year for that matter.

Lastly, I'd like to say, in order to partially counteract the opinion offered by others, that I found the Hermione-SPHEW chapters the best arc in the whole story -- far better than the Azkaban arc, far better than the armies arc.

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-29T05:51:43.264Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I'm not sure it psychologically counts as positive reinforcement of the writer writing more quickly, if one criticizes too much while still it's being written...

Eliezer has said he doesn't mind this thread. (I PM'd him before creating it.)

comment by atorm · 2012-01-28T22:53:28.671Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Agree on bulleted points, but I thought the armies arc was the best by far. I sell HPMoR to my friends by saying "Ender Wiggin goes to Hogwarts!"

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comment by ArisKatsaris · 2012-01-30T10:50:19.363Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Ender Wiggin is just pretend-smart - as mentioned in Adam Cadre's review, his tactics tend to work by authorial fiat. I think HJPEV is much better written, where tactics are concerned.

(As a sidenote, I mentioned HPMOR in the comments to that review and got atleast one more enthusiastic reader for it. :-)

comment by James_Blair · 2012-01-30T03:06:38.690Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

The one time I tried this, it backfired terribly. It seemed like a logical sale, but the war games don't start until quite a fair way in; meanwhile, the first ten chapters (which is what the first chapter recommends trying before giving up) don't have that sort of flavour.

comment by Kaj_Sotala · 2012-01-29T18:38:07.363Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Huh. I'd thought of MoR as a better version of Ender's Game before, but for some reason I didn't catch that similarity.

comment by [deleted] · 2012-01-28T20:28:00.630Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Agreed on nearly point, emphasis on the first, that this thread won't have a good effect on the author's progress.

comment by skepsci · 2012-02-13T09:24:49.954Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Draco seemed far too easily convinced by the evidence that the decline in magic wasn't caused by muggle interbreeding, especially since the largest piece of evidence presented was based on muggle knowledge of genetics that Draco was nearly completely ignorant of. You're not going to be convinced that everything you know is wrong just because an 11-year old tells you that a bunch of allegedly smart people figured out some things which conflict with what you know, in the judgment of said 11-year-old.

At the beginning of Chapter 25, Eliezer writes about the evidence that convinced Draco:

everything Harry presents as strong evidence is in fact strong evidence - the other possibilities are improbable

This is true... but only from Harry's perspective. Harry assigns extremely high confidence to everything that muggle geneticists have figured out, and also believes that he understands the theory well enough to have high confidence in the predictions he makes using that theory. For Draco to find the same evidence equally convincing, he would also have to assign high confidence to the theory that Harry claims muggle geneticists figured out, and high confidence to Harry's ability to use the theory correctly to make predictions.

I am probably modeling Draco as way more Bayesian than he actually is in this analysis. But my interactions with individuals with other strongly held beliefs also lead to the same conclusion, that Draco should have resisted more.

Issues of how I think Draco would have acted aside, I would have liked to see more interaction between the two of them on this question, more investigations. Maybe Draco would want to perform some of the experiments testing Granger's parentage that Harry suggested, rather than immediately predicting the same results as Harry would have? I would have enjoyed seeing more of how a budding experimentalist copes when confronted with not just one but a series of experimental results leading inexorably to a chilling (to Draco) conclusion.

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comment by kephasp · 2017-04-14T21:42:26.336Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

My experience with confronting fellow Christians with scientific evidence is for them to bog us down into discussions about the validity of science.

comment by magfrump · 2012-01-29T06:10:37.649Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Things that I would like to see coming along with the MoRverse:

Snippets of the world-as-it-is outside of Harry's story, like Alicorn's "Flashes" after Radiance. In particular, I'd really like to see more of Cedric Diggory, Draco and Luna's childhoods, the Weasley twins' first years, and the Marauders adventures as history, as well as redeemed Slytherin house and technical magical research after real engineers get their hands on it.

These could also make the Self-Awareness arc a bit less weird by personifying the bullying infrastructure.

I like the way Eliezer handles dementors as a metaphor for death, but as I consider Rowling's intentions for them as metaphors for depression, I'm realizing that that might be even more beautiful, even if Eliezer doesn't have as much to say about it.

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comment by rthomas2 · 2012-07-19T17:20:20.508Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

For me, thinking of the Dementors as death AND depression is a lot of fun--the idea that they're of the same essence is very cool to toss around. Which in turn makes the question of what patronuses are more tangled and intriguing...

Really, every attempt I make at reconciling the two worlds makes every facet of both more interesting! :)

comment by DanielLC · 2012-01-28T18:35:25.262Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

There's a TVTropes discussion on this: Harry Potter Headscratchers

I might as well repeat the ones I put on there.

Shouldn't it be Harry Potter-Evans-Verres and the Methods of Rationality?

Why is Harry so death averse? He claims to be a preference utilitarian, but the sorting hat had no desire to live, yet Harry didn't want it to die.

Why does Harry reject the idea of Horcruxes? You can't save more than half the population, so it's hardly a permanent solution, but you could kill half of the people right before they die, and save the other half. This would work as a hold-over until Harry becomes God. Given my understanding of canon, this wouldn't actually work, but Harry wouldn't have no that yet.

In what way can a crime that hinges on an eleven-year-old boy be considered "the perfect crime"?

According to Wikipedia, timeless physics was discovered in 1999. If this takes place in 1991-1992, how does Harry know about it? Did he work it out himself?

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comment by kilobug · 2012-01-29T10:12:30.648Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

To me the main reason of Harry rejecting Horcruxes is the "anti-Dark Lord Harry program". Harry is trying hard (and with relative success) to prevent becoming a Dark Lord, and rejecting a way to reach immortality for some at the expense of killing others is a way to refuse the Dark Lord path. Harry (in my view) doesn't fully trust himself to wield raw consequentialism, and he respects ethical injunctions like "murder is just wrong" (at least when he's just a 11yo boy and still afraid of becoming a Dark Lord).

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comment by DanielLC · 2012-01-29T20:15:39.722Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

But Harry wasn't afraid of being a Dark Lord until the end of being sorted.

comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-29T07:36:48.189Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Everything on that list (except for the timeless physics) has been answered on the Headscratchers thread itself.

As for timeless Physics, that's just Eliezer making use of artistic licence.

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comment by magfrump · 2012-01-29T06:03:07.627Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I always thought Harry rejected the idea of mass horcruxing because he was talking to Dumbledore and didn't want to look evil, and that (conditional on better methods not coming around and continued trust in Quirrel) he would have discussed this later with Quirrel.

comment by kilobug · 2012-01-28T13:48:11.561Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Edit : contains spoilers

I was a bit disappointed about the Harry-Ginny fake marriage contract story (chapter 25-26). The global plot of Harry hiring the Weasley teens to make Rita Skeeter publish something ridiculous but wrong so Rita would be fired was nice and totally in-character for all of them, but the final story was a bit "due ?" to me. I don't see how the fake marriage contract was such a big deal, enough to get Rita fired, and the length they had to go to make it sounded totally disproportionate compared to the story they ended up with. I would have expected something much more shocking and deep in political consequences than an arranged marriage.

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comment by hamnox · 2012-01-29T06:36:22.328Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I didn't think the marriage contract was as big a deal as the implication that, if the story were taken as something other than a complete fabrication, someone had messed with Gringott's proceedings to cover it up. I can't imagine that Rita Skeeter could keep her job after courting that kind of scandal with the goblin nation.

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comment by Psy-Kosh · 2012-01-29T20:52:11.087Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Gringott's? I thought it was the security of the records of the Wizengamut that was thrown into question by what the twins did, not Gringott's?

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comment by JoshuaZ · 2012-01-29T21:38:39.639Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

They managed to compromise both. From chapter 26:

It may be impossible, but I can imagine tampering with the Wizengamot proceedings. It is unimaginable that the Grand Manager of Gringotts should affix the seal of his office in witness to a false betrothal contract, and Miss Skeeter personally verified that seal

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comment by Psy-Kosh · 2012-01-30T01:12:12.624Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Ah, whoops.

comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-29T07:57:37.801Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

To the sibling, I add:

Anything to do with Harry Potter is obviously going to be a big deal in this world. He's not just a celebrity, he's a household name

Imagine if a newspaper IRL claimed that... I dunno, Bill Gates? .... had, say, Japanese ancestry, and they had incontrovertible proof of it. Also, they'd found secret intelligence that he was planning to start a war against Bhutan with the support of the Phillipines. And all of that turned out to be false. Might not kick up a scandal, but it'd sure kick up a wtf-storm and damage the newspaper's credibility.

comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-30T08:15:39.874Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Why do wizards speak English?

Rather, why do wizards speak English that's so similar to Muggle English?

The wizard and muggle societies have been more or less isolated from each other for several centuries now (since 1692 in Rowling's canon, probably longer in Eliezer's). You'd expect a significant amount of linguistic drift to have taken place. I don't think a small trickle of Muggle-borns is enough to counter-act that.

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comment by ArisKatsaris · 2012-01-30T10:31:15.123Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Muggle-borns are that minority which have both parents be muggles, but there's also intermarriage between muggles and wizards/witches, so that there's a significant number of halfblood children.

And in all of UK there's only one village (Hogsmeade) that's solely composed of wizards/witches, in the rest of the country it seems that wizards/witches are surrounded by Muggle neighbours, probably with charms around them so that the Muggles don't notice anything strange, but nonetheless interacting with said Muggles...

Alternate explanation: "It's magic."

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-30T10:48:41.611Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I never got the impression that the non-Hogsmeade wizards interacted significantly with their muggle neighbours; they seem far too ignorant of muggle life for that. If anything, wizard settlements (notice how it's generally a number of families that settle in a village, rather than just one?) seem to be akin to ethnic enclaves.

Half-bloods... wonder how much effect they'd have.

IRL, if there is a significant degree of intermarriage between speakers of two different languages, do a large number of children grow up bilingual? That would be a good place to start looking, I guess.

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comment by thomblake · 2012-02-10T00:56:19.560Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I never got the impression that the non-Hogsmeade wizards interacted significantly with their muggle neighbours; they seem far too ignorant of muggle life for that.

Half-bloods...

I've never put these two things next to each other before, but that's a bit of a head-scratcher. If I remember correctly, a very large proportion of Hogwarts students are half-bloods. So... do wizards and muggles actually get along, or is there something strange / sinister / squicky going on there?

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-02-10T11:18:21.773Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

So... do wizards and muggles actually get along, or is there something strange / sinister / squicky going on there?

Hmm, how many half-bloods are there? Do we ever really meet a typical half-blood? (Harry isn't really half-blood, and Harry, Snape and Voldemort all had unusual childhoods...)

Muggle-marriers may be a tiny minority. Their existence does not imply that wizards in general get along with muggles, even if there's nothing squicky going on.

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comment by thomblake · 2012-02-10T14:35:40.269Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Hmm, how many half-bloods are there?

From Wikipedia:

Half-bloods are the most common wizard blood, far outnumbering pure-bloods and Muggle-borns. Rowling has stated that of the Hogwarts annual intake, 50% are half-bloods.

Though yes, 'half-blood' here refers to any wizard that isn't muggleborn or pure-blood. So a great deal of them might just be descendents of muggleborns.

comment by hamnox · 2012-01-28T21:38:46.203Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I don't feel comfortable trying to pick apart Eliezer's handling of the story when I do not know where he's trying to go with it. If I do not know what a persons' goals are, how can I possibly know if they are accomplishing them optimally?

Most of the things I would complain about are things that seem irrelevant to the main story plot, but I don't yet know that they aren't relevant.

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comment by [deleted] · 2014-12-14T16:06:51.323Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Oh come on, you can't sneeze in Hogwarts without missing a vital clue. This is what I find sometimes hard to stomach: the unbelievable signal-to-noise ratio.

comment by RolfAndreassen · 2012-01-28T16:52:38.303Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I'd have updated more frequently... [/wistful]

No, seriously. I might have dropped the Self-Actualisation arc, but then again for all I know it's setting up something Awesome later, so maybe it's necessary.

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comment by DanielLC · 2012-01-28T18:37:20.755Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

In line with this, I'd have it update more regularly. It's much easier to wait months between story arcs if the chapters in said arcs are spaced out throughout those months, rather than all being posted the same day.

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-29T06:33:34.616Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Post arc together: Readers complain you're taking too long to update.

Post arc chapter-by-chapter: Readers complain they're bored of the arc.

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comment by gwern · 2013-06-04T08:39:25.818Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I've made a remarkable discovery: there are numbers in between 1 and 90. In honor of my genius, I call them 'gwernums'; examples of 'gwernums' include '5', '9', and gwernums requiring advanced techniques, like '20'.

Instead of waiting either 1 day or 3 months to post chapters, authors can post after gwernum days! (In the interests of promoting a more sane update schedule worldwide, I hereby release all known gwernums into the public domain.)

comment by Sly · 2012-01-28T19:47:51.167Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I am going to be terribly unoriginal and say that the whole Hermione bullying plot was boring to read, and should have been removed.

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comment by mstevens · 2012-01-30T16:46:22.285Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I liked the Hermione arc to a large degree. SPHEW was a good joke, and I enjoyed seeing the other witches develop as heroines.

The backing things out for the sake of continuing to be able to write a Harry Potter story felt a little forced.

comment by JoshuaZ · 2012-01-28T16:47:34.601Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

In chapter 2, people don't leave a room to laugh the way Harry's parents do.

Also chapter, 2, McGonagall's final statement while amusing isn't something she should have sufficient data on to say yet.

The entire SPEW thing took way too long. Moreover, it actually comes across as accidentally anti-feminist. Harry is dealing with the terrible atrocity that is Azkaban and Hermione's equivalent is fighting school bullies? And even that requires assistance from Harry?

For readers that don't know what a horcrux is since they haven't read the original books (which at this point is probably quite a few), what Voldemort did to the Pioneer plaque that is much harder to figure out. At least some minimal explanation would have been good. This can probably still get remedied. But I'm really worried that their existence is going to come across later as some sort of diabolus ex machina.

comment by RobertLumley · 2012-01-28T14:35:03.176Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

The first time I read it, which was before I had been introduced to any of the LW memes (or really, just transhumanism) I found the section on Askaban to be really... forced.

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Specifically, I remember thinking that the idea that dementors were death was a bit cheesy. Taking a metaphor and making it corporeal seems to be a bit much to me. After I reread it a second time, I didn't have nearly as much objection to the passage, since I actually understood what he was getting at. But it still probably remains my least favorite section. But that's not really saying much.

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So I think that section either needs more or less transhumanism, so that his point is either clear to everyone or doesn't confuse unfamiliar people.

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comment by hamnox · 2012-01-28T16:44:13.426Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I find myself confused about how dementors can be a personification of death in the way that Harry sees it when that's not how death actually is in the HP universe. I managed to keep a hold of my suspension of disbelief with the idea that the afterlife is a magical version of a brain upload and only works when you have magic in you to record your brainstate at death. Death is still death for muggles and squibs, wizards have just figured out a clever workaround since dementors first came about.

The fridge horror of realizing that, under this theory, muggleborns and the parents of squibs would live on forever while knowing that their relatives are gone was rather enlightening. It made me realize all over again that death truly is a horrible thing that no one who had not lived with it all their lives would willingly sign up for. Who knows? Maybe magic in its entirety was just a side effect to Atlantis' solution for death.

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-29T06:21:33.805Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I managed to keep a hold of my suspension of disbelief with the idea that the afterlife is a magical version of a brain upload and only works when you have magic in you to record your brainstate at death.

We're not sure if the afterlife exists in the MoR-verse.

ETA: Eliezer weighed in on this a long time ago.

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-29T06:20:09.623Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Specifically, I remember thinking that the idea that dementors were death was a bit cheesy. Taking a metaphor and making it corporeal seems to be a bit much to me.

Uh... That's hardly a new) archetype).

For non-death examples, see every single god in Greek/Roman/Vedic mythology.

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comment by RobertLumley · 2012-01-29T13:46:28.313Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I didn't say it was new, I just said I didn't like it. :-) And in my (limited) experience in literature, such direct personification (where death is, in essence, a character) is most often found in genres like surrealist of postmodern literature, which I don't think Eliezer is going for.

comment by buybuydandavis · 2020-12-20T04:30:32.350Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I had great hopes. GREAT hopes.

A book of Narrative that exemplifies values makes for a religion. What I've come to realize/believe, is that you don't have to believe The Narrative is literally true for The Narrative to serve the positive purposes of a religion.

While all the rationality homilies are fine and dandy, I thought HPMOR could have been more. HPMOR was so close to a transvaluation of values.

  • Mum and Dad, Hermione's friendship and Draco's journey, Neville and Seamus and Lavender and Dean, the blue sky and brilliant Sun and all bright things, the Earth, the stars, the promise, everything humanity was and everything it would become...
  • And someday when the descendants of humanity have spread from star to star, they won’t tell the children about the history of Ancient Earth until they’re old enough to bear it; and when they learn they’ll weep to hear that such a thing as Death had ever once existed!
  • You are not invincible, and someday the human species will end you. I will end you if I can, by the power of mind and magic and science. I won’t cower in fear of Death, not while I have a chance of winning. I won’t let Death touch me, I won’t let Death touch the ones I love. And even if you do end me before I end you, Another will take my place, and another, Until the wound in the world is healed at last…

A Rejection of Death as part of the Natural Order. Time Binding. Humanity as the Glass Half Full. Now that's a transvaluation of values. 

That's what I wish the Narrative had turned on. The moral issue. Values. Transvaluation of values in Voldemort. Isn't that Harry's dream? That we can all be saved? That we are all worth saving? And that people can come to understand that?

If Harry could understand that, why not Voldemort, the guy with the same brain?

That's the argument to win. That's the case to be made. That's the story to be told.

Instead, the climax was an Encyclopedia Brown Beats the Bad Guy by solving a cognitive puzzle. Harry won because Voldemort didn't know all that Harry was capable of. Sure. You get a win that way. But what was learned? That it's good to have powers the enemy doesn't know about? Well, yeah, but that's neither news nor uplifting.

And "having people to save gives you cognitive superpowers" just isn't true. Maybe it motivates you to work diligently. But it doesn't turn your brain up to 11 when faced with dozens of enemies about to kill you.

comment by brazil84 · 2013-06-03T17:40:41.751Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I want to echo the comment that with a good editor, the book could easily rival some of the best fiction in quality. The main character is a bit of a Mary Sue, but that can be forgiven since most hero fiction has an element of Mary-Sueness to it.

comment by Desrtopa · 2012-02-10T15:18:37.474Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I find it a bit weird just how many students at Hogwarts are scions of Noble and Most Ancient Houses. It seems to me as if Eliezer has equated "pure blood" from the original books with "noble house," and the resulting prevalence strikes me as demographically improbable.

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comment by thomblake · 2012-02-10T15:42:04.566Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

"Noble and Most Ancient House" is usually only prepended to "Black", in canon or fan works. There are few enough wizards that I would believe all purebloods can use that sort of distinction, and for someone to actually be concerned with their own blood purity they should have records that invariably would link them to several prominent houses if you went back far enough.

So it doesn't strike me as odd that "pure blood" is equated with "noble house".

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comment by Desrtopa · 2012-02-10T16:11:16.931Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

The Weasleys are canonically pure bloods, but "class traitors," and so do not associate much with other pure bloods, but I don't think they were ever meant to be a noble house.

I think "pure blood" was only meant to imply that a person can trace their heritage back a long way exclusively through people who were witches and wizards, but this doesn't mean that they necessarily ever held a position of nobility. To paraphrase something from one of Terry Pratchett's books, "The Vimes name goes back a long way, but so does the name Smith." I always figured that pure bloods were supposed to be analogous to the upper British social classes, and there's a big difference between a gentleman and a Lord of the Commonwealth.

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comment by thomblake · 2012-02-10T16:39:35.777Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Depending how you count it in canon, there are between 40 and 160 students in a Hogwarts class, per year, from all 4 houses combined. 1/4 of them are purebloods, so that's between 10 and 40 purebloods per year. If wizard families have on average 2 children and start having kids when they're 30, then we'd need to account for between 150 and 600 pureblood nuclear families at the time of the story. Arbitrarily assuming that a pureblood family should have about 3 branches at a given time, that's 50 to 200 pureblood family lines to classify.

How many noble houses should there be? According to this page, there appear to be 498 existing hereditary peerages in the UK. While Magical Britain isn't proportional in size, I don't see any reason why it should be. I rather think of it more like the SCA.

My feeling is that in the beginning, all the wizards got to be Lords, and you're a pureblood if you can trace your line back to them.

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comment by Desrtopa · 2012-02-10T17:00:32.595Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

My feeling is that in the beginning, all the wizards got to be Lords

The SCA can get away with having an arbitrarily large proportion of lords and ladies because they don't need any real assets or authority. But if everyone is a Lord, then for practical purposes nobody is. You end up with a Too Many Chiefs, Not Enough Indians situation. A Lord needs to be able to have servants.

It's silly to assume that Magical Britain has a similar proportion of peers to nonmagical Britain, that would imply fewer than four peers in the entire country even by the most generous counts, but when you've got Lords with real rights and privileges of nobility over the rest of the population, and in many or most cases, real money too, having them at a rate of one in four, or even one in forty, just seems demographically bizarre. It's the sort of proportion you might expect of land-owning citizens with voting rights, in an earlier democracy, not the sort of proportion you'd expect of Lords and Ladies.

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comment by drethelin · 2012-02-10T18:01:31.816Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

A wizarding lord is in no way restricted by servants. You have house elves, enchantments, transfiguration, apparition. You don't have lesser wizards as servants. You don't even fall into the problem of having too many lords and not enough land, since wizards can create or hide land among other land. It would be entirely plausible to me that a very large proportion of wizards were "lords."

You can also remember that Hogwarts isn't the only educational possibility for wizard children, and indeed that it is an expensive one, judging by how the weaselys complain about the cost every year. There's probably a higher proportion of lords there than among the general population, due to the wealth needed to study at hogwarts.

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comment by Desrtopa · 2012-02-10T18:23:44.054Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

All of those things except for house elves are accessible to any wizard. Having things anyone can get won't set you apart status-wise. Without having things that are scarce to other people (not just things like land and wealth but intangibles such as privilege and authority,) there's nothing to set a lord apart from an ordinary person. Slightly scarce assets can only lead to slight status elevation.

The Weasleys may complain about the cost of attending Hogwarts, but they're poor, and have managed to send several children there, so it can't be all that expensive. There may be a higher proportion of lords at Hogwarts due to its status as Magical Britain's preeminent wizarding school, but if a low-income family can afford to put all seven of their children through the school, then the cost is clearly not a significant filter, and having several scions of Noble Houses in each year still looks weird unless Magical Britain is considerably larger than it's implied to be.

comment by pedanterrific · 2012-02-13T16:51:04.407Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

My feeling is that in the beginning, all the wizards got to be Lords

But if everyone is a Lord, then for practical purposes nobody is. You end up with a Too Many Chiefs, Not Enough Indians situation. A Lord needs to be able to have servants.

It's important to remember that the Statute of Secrecy was only established in 1692. The family tree of the Noble and Most Ancient House of Black goes back to the Middle Ages.

Noble wizards / common wizards is unlikely to be the relevant demographic proportion; it makes sense that wizards would be disproportionately represented in the peerage.

comment by drethelin · 2012-02-10T17:53:55.323Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

It's not actually that many. It's a small minority OF the students we know, and the students we know are already a small minority of the students in the school.

comment by ShardPhoenix · 2012-01-29T05:29:19.506Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Occasionally the writing and sentence structure can feel a little hurried, especially at the beginning of chapters. It's as if Eliezer starts writing at the beginning of a chapter but takes a while to fully get into his rhythm. There have also probably been a few too many tangents from the main plot, but Eliezer's latest author note seems to acknowledge this.

comment by Grognor · 2012-01-28T18:06:54.759Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

My meta-comment is that you should have posted this in whatever the current HPMoR discussion thread is. It's an established community norm that talk of the fanfic should be kept there. Downvoted for that reason.

My regular comment:

I would have had Eliezer spend way less time on the "Hermione fights an endless supply of bullies" subplot. I wouldn't be averse to just removing it entirely.

I would also have all these damn hints and suggestions and leads and such be made explicit or way less subtle. I'm stupid and busy; I'm not going to get them on the first read, and I'm not going to read twice.

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comment by atorm · 2012-01-28T23:39:33.555Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I LIKE subtlety. It flatters my ego if I see it, and if I don't, I don't know that I'm missing it. I hate how modern cop dramas feel the need to explain the significance of every clue to the viewer as soon as a character understands it. If you miss it, you'll eventually figure it out when the plot comes around to it.

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-29T06:28:31.912Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I LIKE subtlety. It flatters my ego if I see it, and if I don't, I don't know that I'm missing it.

Data point. I started this thread to complain about the blood of Atlantis. The conclusion is based on a long chain of conjunctive reasoning that basically feels like an asspull. Harry has absolutely no good reason to believe something that complex.

Then I when I went looking for the link, I realised that.... The chapter's called "Hold Off on Proposing Solutions".

The feeling of "that's epic"-ness cannot be described in words.

comment by Grognor · 2012-01-29T22:33:44.466Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Well, I hope you think it's okay that my tastes differ from yours.

comment by major · 2012-01-29T12:06:36.477Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

It's a bit long, sorry.

Let me bore y'all with a bit of my puzzle-solving MoR.

Near the end of 2010 I came up with a theory (which I codenamed NBT), some far-out thing that explained a few observations, and removed a good deal of confusion. As an aside it also led me to predict the existence of a certain clue - more on that later. Also, I think it may be endgame-relevant.

Since this theory was kinda subtle, I felt I needed more data on it, so I filed it away and waited. Somewhere along the way I realized that it explained even more things than I thought, thus raising my confidence in it (retrograde prediction? - my surprise about it is evidence to me, even if it wouldn't convince anyone else), though of course it could still be subject to positive bias, as I was well aware.

Enter the final batch of SA arc, late August and early September (2011). It contained an unlikely event, one I would have bet against seeing, without NBT. With it, it was just the kind of thing I would expect. So I marked NBT confirmed. Shortly afterwards a random re-reading of an older part led me to discover the clue I predicted earlier, an innocent little sentence I completely missed before, one that contains a hint connected to the nature of magic. As it happens, this clue also explains how the Interdict of Merlin was made - the mechanism.

Thus feeling my theory NBT strongly confirmed I confronted the one part I was still confused about, and within ten minutes I moved from 'a bit tricky but possible' to 'simple, elegant, neat'. I didn't need any knowledge that wasn't available when I came up with NBT, so I could have had that answer a lot earlier - I'll call the crucial bit of understanding V-factor.

(Also, Self Actualization confirmed one more prediction of mine. I suppose for others that particular bit of noticing-your-confusion could be a hint for a difference-from-canon mystery that didn't lead anywhere; for me, it was evidence I was right all along about one more thing. This theory was required for later, but I'm sure I wouldn't have needed the confirmation; I was pretty sure of this one. Just mentioning that to show why I'm glad SA happened.)

All this reminded me of the moral of That Alien Message, specifically how limiting it is to think 'we need more information' and do nothing, instead of actually sitting down, and confronting the mystery. On one hand I saw things most would say can't possibly be seen, on the other hand I failed to find out things fast enough because I didn't think I could possibly have seen them.

Because I'm not perfect (yet), I didn't update on everything immediately; to be more precise, it wasn't until January of 2012 that I applied the V-factor to my previous theories of the nature of MoR magic, but when I did, I became unconfused. The First Cause of Verresverse Magic became clear. Looking back, and seeing that I could have had the whole thing a year earlier if I tried - not hindsight, the conclusions that led to it are clearly traceable - really drove the point home.


My point with all this? Methods of Rationality is full of subtle puzzles, reasons beneath the obvious, as others have pointed out in much less word, and also plenty of ways to practice and test your rationality skills. Noticing confusion, generating alternative hypotheses, countering positive bias, above all. And yes, these are well constructed puzzles, not like the messy reality, but the point is to have the grooves worn into the mind.

Nitpicking the story, complaining about things we wouldn't even notice from other authors, holding Eliezer to higher standards, because 'Hey, we're rational(ists)!' while failing to notice that these may well be deliberate hints of something deeper ... it's ... well ... kinda stupid, ain't it? Like how sophisticated fan-fiction readers might pattern-match Harry of early chapters as Mary Sue, while failing to notice all the clues about his coldness, concluding it is a sign of incompetent author, when it is in fact a hint of something more going on. A useful lesson about how noticing confusion and generating an alternative hypothesis might be needed, at best.

Also, if you have been reading LW for a while and have been passionate about improving your rationality, yet you failed to notice so far how good an opportunity MoR is ... I just spoiled it for you; it was a test, and you failed it. Sorry.

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-30T03:50:59.441Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

tl;dr = I figured out why Dumbledore set fire to a chicken, but I'm not going to tell you.

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comment by ArisKatsaris · 2012-01-30T10:05:44.349Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Don't be uncharitable. He's providing clues (initials and such) that are designed to show he has a specific theory figured out, so we can see afterwards if he was right or wrong, but without spoiling the mystery for the rest of us. (And despite some people who occasionally claim that spoiling a mystery doesn't "spoil" anyone's pleasure, some of us strongly prefer not to be spoiled nonetheless)

His post therefore had positive utility for me, as he intrigued me in a fun way, so I upvoted his comment.

On my next reread (a few days hence I guess) I'll try to also figure out what he figured out. If I figure it out, I'll probably provide a few password-cyphered sentences to show I've also figured it out, and provide the key only after it's confirmed or not.

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comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-30T10:42:20.292Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

His post therefore had positive utility for me, as he intrigued me in a fun way, so I upvoted his comment

This has been oscillating between -1 and -3 for a while now. That is, while some people seem to find it intriguing, some others (and these are in a majority by some small margin) find it nothing but annoying. (At least, that was my reason for downvoting... I'm generalising from one example here.)

And I find it annoying because it's a long-winded chronology of his epiphanies. It's like a chronology of a war where you don't know who's fighting who over what or even which century the war is taking place: totally pointless.

All the positive utility in this post could be generated by saying "Hey, I thought of this awesome theory (codename: NBT) that explains everything in MoR. Could just be positive bias, but I doubt it. Explained an observation in SA that I considered really unlikely. But it's not just SA, it explains everything in every other arc too!!" That's it, the end.

But if that's what he wanted to say, he could have said it in the Discussion Thread. No, that was just something he was trying to get out of his system. The point he was trying to make was "HPMoR is an awesome fic and you guys have no business criticising its surface deficiencies."

Which he could have made without the long digression into NBT.

And then there's the whole implicit "How dare you enjoy this fic in a way other than my way of enjoying it?!" business.

(major likes solving puzzles? Good for him. Some of us like thinking about the worldbuilding/ witnessing the awesome/ thinking about the character dynamics. It's not sacrilege to say "meh" to the various hints implanted in the story if you're more interested in looking for the tentacle rape.)

(And despite some people who occasionally claim that spoiling a mystery doesn't "spoil" anyone's pleasure, some of us strongly prefer not to be spoiled nonetheless)

Fair enough, but there's this awesome tech called rot13 which allows you to have your cake and eat it too. I hope you realise that there do exist some people who'd rather know the broad strokes of the plot in advance.

But if you'd rather not share, that's OK too. Just don't post a 400-word essay on finding out about it. Not when a 50-word paragraph does the trick.

Replies from: major
comment by major · 2012-01-30T17:28:00.234Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

No, that was just something he was trying to get out of his system.

You got that right. After this thing becomes relevant in the story, there may be complains, and while I'm sure Eliezer will explain it competently, people are prone to throwing accusations of asspull around. So if there is enough detail in a time-logged, non-edited comment, it can be pointed out later. 'It's not an asspull, look, this idiot even guessed it. You can read about the stuff he used to do it in the Sequences.'

Now that I no longer feel like I'm doing LW a disservice by sitting on such validation, I can go back to speculating quietly.

As for the rest, I guess you're right, though I note that's not why you started this thread. Also of note is the fact that this is LessWrong, not some random ff site. Getting things right might be higher priority here, than elsewhere.

comment by major · 2012-01-30T17:23:31.392Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Um.. The initials are not clues, NBT is just how I refered to the theory (Next Big Thing). Sorry about any confusion this might have caused.

comment by Psy-Kosh · 2012-01-29T20:56:59.506Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Um... You kept talking about how you kept finding confirmation, but... did you intend to skip actually telling us what NBT is?

(ie, you said you spoiled it, but I notice no actual description of NBT or which specific bits of evidence you used.)

Replies from: Anubhav, major
comment by Anubhav · 2012-01-30T03:48:21.664Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

you said you spoiled it, but I notice no actual description of NBT

What he actually said was

if you have been reading LW for a while and have been passionate about improving your rationality, yet you failed to notice so far how good an opportunity MoR is ... I just spoiled it for you

Ergo, spotting that MoR is awesome was a test, and we flunked it. Because apparently we failed to notice that MoR is awesome.

... or something like that.

Replies from: gjm
comment by gjm · 2012-01-31T14:51:53.018Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

What he's claiming isn't that the rest of us failed to notice that MoR is awesome, but that the rest of us failed to notice that MoR is awesome as a series of puzzle-solving rationality exercises.

comment by major · 2012-01-30T08:27:49.692Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

did you intend to skip actually telling us what NBT is?

Of course. The hard part about noticing your confusion isn't recognizing it, when it is pointed out. It's, you know, the noticing part. I tell you, I get a few points of karma for it, maybe, and everyone looses the opportunity to do it for themselves. Now, that's negative sum!

I think one thing that keeps people from asking questions is the flinching from the uncertainty that may never get resolved. But that's clearly not the case with MoR (unless Eliezer is evil, and his puzzles will never be resolved in-story). These are well stuctured puzzles leading us along (hell I'm identifying puzzle arcs), and we just have to make some effort.

I guess my sense of justice doesn't like how something deep gets complains about surface stuff, when that surface can in fact be justified by the deeper stuff. Stupid sense of justice.

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comment by gwern · 2013-06-04T08:32:07.403Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

did you intend to skip actually telling us what NBT is?

Of course. The hard part about noticing your confusion isn't recognizing it, when it is pointed out. It's, you know, the noticing part. I tell you, I get a few points of karma for it, maybe, and everyone looses the opportunity to do it for themselves. Now, that's negative sum!

No, it just looks annoying. If you really wanted to prod thought, you'd offer the proverbial 'hostage to fortune' in the form of a hash precommitment to your NBT theory so you have verifiably expressed a particular theory well in advance of MoR ending and have exposed yourself to public ridicule in the event your theory is laughably wrong or you had none at all; knowing that you now have something at stake, people might take you more seriously.

comment by TheShrike · 2013-05-26T09:30:54.586Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Nobody's infallible. What kind of rationalist approaches a work with a couple holes in it and leaves under the assumption that the writer is simply so perfect that everything will be addressed and wrapped up neatly by the end? Isn't it far more likely that in writing a fantastic teaching tool/test, Eliezer occasionally leaves a thread or two hanging?