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comment by Ben (ben-lang) · 2022-08-09T17:58:22.167Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I really enjoyed the previous Luna story and am excited to get into this one. Don't know how fiddly it is to do but it would be nice if these had the "next" buttons that the chamber of secrets ones had.

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comment by lsusr · 2022-08-09T23:56:53.329Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I have added them back.

comment by Measure · 2022-01-12T14:34:39.433Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Platform Ten and Three-Quarters

That explains why they didn't get through—they were one and one-quarter too high.

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comment by Alex Vermillion (tomcatfish) · 2022-01-13T04:57:00.190Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

I believe they meant to be; they were checking for a school for "double witches" (muggle:witch :: witch:double-witch).

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comment by Measure · 2022-01-13T14:49:25.944Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Yep, my bad. I thought that this was still related to the Nine and One-Half thing.

comment by jimv · 2022-01-12T11:10:51.453Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Possible typo: "... three fifth-years. The fifty-hears..."

Possible phrase left over from a previous edit: "Luna shook it."

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comment by lsusr · 2022-01-12T11:13:47.563Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Thanks. Fixed the first typo. Clarified the other bit.

comment by Robert Kennedy (istandleet) · 2022-03-13T01:08:58.459Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

There is a "going going" in this chapter as well

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comment by lsusr · 2022-03-16T07:23:42.332Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Fixed. Thanks.

comment by jimv · 2022-01-12T11:19:07.506Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

And around the paragraph where Fay is poking fourth years:

"Luna watched through the window.

...

Luna placed her hand over Fay's wand-hand."

It seems like Luna stayed outside, peering in through the window. Then in inside to put her hand over the wand hand.

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comment by lsusr · 2022-01-12T11:44:09.815Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Whoops. Fixed. Thanks.

comment by jimv · 2022-01-12T11:15:04.453Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

Also this feels a bit jumbled: "It made not difference to just say you believed in a double-magic school."

And there's an instance of "She rubber her head" that should probably be "rubbed".

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comment by lsusr · 2022-01-12T11:41:54.997Z · LW(p) · GW(p)

They were typos too. Fixed. Thanks.